The Ball Pit of Doom
Renamed by Tom H
(That's Me)
Here the Story. Bye
One dark bone chilling afternoon I was at Mcdonald's. I was in the playground there was no one in there so I got nervous. I just went on the slide and then I had a bad feeling about going down. Then I was going down. I was going at like 6 mph that’s terrifying.
Next I went into the ball pit. I was falling down. I was anxious I just about passed out but then I hit a corner. I was so low down but I was not at the bottom that was a good thing but there was one thing that was odd. I was going up and up but I did not go up to the top
“Ahhhh” I fell because they added a slide so I can go faster and that’s how I have never gone down there. Then I was halfway there and a plaster fell on me so I tried to get it off but I could not because I will fall. Then that happened so I got a lollipop and got up with that and I got up to the top. I put the lollipop in my mouth. The End.
Please Send Feedback To See If I did Something Bad. Thanks
Hi it's Tom, Can you please send feedback Thanks.Tom Out
ReplyDeleteHi Tom, you had some writing that was a little hard to spell out like this word, mph. I'm thinking that maybe you should re read your work because some of it doesn't make sence. The rest of the writing was blowing mey socks off.
ReplyDeleteHi tom it's good to see you're All some work keep it up
ReplyDeleteThis comment has been removed by the author.
DeleteThanks Sam for the comment, so how has your day been because my day is going to be good was your weekend good. But just remember to make your comment longer and better. Just saying you put my name with no capital letter. Bye Tom Out
ReplyDeleteMy weekend has been good tom how has you're weekend go tom it has been a long time so I am going to comment cor bin Bye.Sam out
ReplyDelete